Sadly, this was the last and final week of writing 2. It sucks that it is coming to an end, but it is an accomplishment finishing. This last week, I put together my final portfolio and reflected back on my learning over the quarter. It really made me realize how much I learned and how it has benefitted me. It didn't quite sink in until this weekend that I've grown so much as a writer and as a learner. I feel much more aware of my surroundings than I did before taking the class too, which makes me happy that I benefitted so much from the class. It makes me feel motivated to do well in my other classes too, because it gives me hope that there will be a reward at the end. I'll miss this class and all of these oh-so-fun blogs. This is my last thlog and blog post ever on this blog page, so I wish everyone a merry christmas and to all a good rest of the year. Peace.

Thlog 9

This week was pretty brief because we only had one class, but I actually learned a lot. During the presentations, we were presented with lots of information on writing and concepts that are essential for the college student to master. Although I already know most of the things taught on sentence structure, proper use of the comma, and proper use of the semi colon, it was good to learn about that stuff again to keep up-to-date and fresh on that stuff. In addition I learned some new things through doing my own presentation. As I worked with my group on presenting parallelism, I learned about the topic in more detail and started making connections between parallelism in the physical world and the content that we are learning in this class. I found it interesting the I could analyze a piece of architecture for its rhetorical features and actually identify a purpose for having certain things. As I move farther into the quarter with this class, I continue to make connections to my own life and I think that's really cool. I've learned so much already and It's only my first quarter here at UCSB!

Week 8 Thlog

I really liked this week and the work I did. To start, getting feedback on the rough draft of my WP3 was very helpful. I was able to take the advice fro my peer readers and incorporate it in my work which helped me out a lot. In my WP2, I got a lower score then I would have liked to so that was definitely a wake-up call. Many of the comments on my final, graded paper were about lacking specifics and direct evidence. I felt like this was the hardest and most boring writing project that we had, and I feel like my grade reflected that as well. However, it was a learning experience so I picked my head up and learned from it. Unlike the WP2, the WP3 involved a lot more creativity which I enjoyed. I was able to make the corrections to the content and style of writing that were necessary, and as a result I feel like I did much better on this one than the last. I used direct evidence from both of my translated genres that proved my main points, and I was also able to reference the course readings for additional support and credibility. All in all, I was pretty happy with the final result of my WP3. It's hard to believe that the quarter is coming to an end too! I really enjoy this class and appreciate what I'm going to take away from it, so it's kind of a bummer, but also a feeling of accomplishment. The only work that's left now is the final portfolio, so I'll have to grind that out over the next few weeks. Yes, it will be a lot of work and probably make me very tired, but it's the final stretch so it will get done. All is well in the world of writing 2!

Thlog week 7

 Week 7, I learned a lot more about translating genres and how they are applicable to the real world. I feel that the process of the WP3 really helped me dial that in. With my PB3a, I wasn't as specific as
I needed to be so the comments really helped me. I was capturing the most general aspects of my topic where I needed to go more in depth. In addition, I got handed back my WP2 where I received the lowest score I had on anything in college so far- a 7.5. This showed me, first of all, that there is a ton of room to improve. I learned that I didn't go enough in depth in my project and didn't use enough specific quotes and facts to prove my point as well as add credibility. I took Zack's comments into consideration when I made my WP3 analysis. I felt like Week seven was a bit of a wake-up call because It showed me that I need to be more proficient in the way I do my work and I need to spend more time going in depth.

PB3a - Nutritional Awareness

PB3a - Nutritional Awareness

Is controlling the food that’s put into your body important to you? Well, it should be. Foods play a huge role in the way we look and feel as human beings, but also influences our health dramatically. It can be the determining factor of acquiring a disease, chronic condition, or shortening your life. Food is an imperative part of living a healthy and happy life! So, I chose to analyse an article on Nutrition, and the likelihood of eating disorders across several professions, called Students of dietetics & nutrition; a high risk group for eating disorders?. My sole objective was to understand how the risks of these disorders vary among different professional groups, and derive a better understanding of how these disorders affect people’s health. By becoming more aware of the disorders caused from lack of Nutritional knowledge, it will make us more conscious about the way we eat and the potential risks of developing bad eating habits. Furthermore, translating this genre[Nutritional Eating Disorders] into two new ones that conform to specific age groups can tell us even more about the potential benefits and dangers of eating and make us healthier, smarter eaters.

For a genre translated from the original publication that conforms to a younger audience, a publication discussing the healthiest food choices for the young, developing brain and body would be extremely beneficial for kids to read. It would be educational and could benefit the lives of kids who are oblivious to the imperative nature of nutritional knowledge and application of the knowledge. An article from this new genre discussing the importance of healthy eating would be most effective if it first discussed the negative effects of eating unhealthy foods and provided relevant examples. Such examples could consist of pictures showing unhealthy, fatty body organs caused by unhealthy eating or visual, straight-forward, and easy to understand charts exemplifying the contrast between the mental performance of a healthy eater and a non-healthy eater with pictures of healthy and unhealthy food under the corresponding picture. The important aspect here is the use of visuals to allow a younger audience to understand the main ideas presented. Just as Important as showing the negative effects of unhealthy eating, the positive effects of healthy eating need to be made clear as well. An article of this genre could present examples of athletic performances enhanced by healthy eating, or pictures and diagrams of a healthy, functioning body to express the importance of healthy dieting. The main goal is to show kids that eating healthy and nutritious foods will benefit them in the long run, and educate them of what food choices are right and wrong.

In addition to the genre derived from nutrition and the likelihood of eating disorders across different professions conforming to a younger audience, I came up with a genre that would suite an older audience too. Once people are far past the stages of developing as humans, it’s important to focus on prevention and preservation of your body. The genre I came up with for an older audience that would conform to these necessities is foods that promote health preservation for older people. Unlike the other translated genre, this one is intended to provide older people with healthy food choices that support a functioning, balanced body. Many older adults are unaware of the health risks from poor diet, so an article from this genre would be extremely beneficial. This genre would possess some of the same conventions as the genre geared toward a younger audience like the use of visuals, but include more sophistication and statistics exemplifying the potential dangers of unhealthy eating. The readers of this genre will be more educated than the younger audience, so they will be able to interpret the meaning of these statistics and factual information. In addition, it would be beneficial for an article of this genre to include potential benefits of eating healthy in order to persuade the reader of its legitimacy and importance.

The two new genres derived from the original possess very similar conventions with respect intentions. They are both intended to strike awareness and persuade in their audience's benefit. These genres differ with content and obviously audience, which signifies the contrast in age groups. By translating the original genre into two new ones that have similar content, it makes the information presented conform to specific age groups more precisely which evidently makes them more effective.

Thlog week 6

This week, we went further in depth about writer's moves and how they affect the rhetoric behind different pieces. This has helped me understand author's intentions more, and has made me a more cognitive reader and writer. Aside from the WP2 and knowledge I derived from writing on the articles I analyzed, the online class helped me understand author's style more. The painter's styles all varied which signified differences in the way they presented the information. By seeing the ways that the painters went about painting tree's, I learned that everyone has a different approach of completing a piece. By finding a path that works best for you as an individual, it makes you a better writer because not only have you taken the move yourself, but you've found a way that conforms to your own unique style. From learning about the style that fits a person best, I now think about what moves fit my style when I write, and I believe that it will help me as a writer portraying my ideas. I did find a bit of difficulty following the painter's intentions of framing certain parts of the tree and how it connects to their purpose, but I feel like analyzing author's framing when writing is more straight-forward because I have more experience with it. All in all, I continue to feel like I'm learning new things and I'm happy with the improvement I see in myself.

Tree-Painter's Moves

In the Family Guy Video, The artist's attempts to hide the bush and make it a secret to the viewer. I’m not sure as to why he does this, but his move is making it hidden or blended in. The next video of the man teaching how to paint trees uses metaphors to describe what he is doing. These metaphors(his move) help the reader understand how to paint the trees in a way that makes visualizing it easier to understand. He paints thicker initially, and then uses different brushes to thin it out and make it look more natural. The disney artists do almost the complete opposite. They start very rough and then add details with thicker, sharper paint. They also visualize the trees in different ways which makes their own moves unique. They artists describe the way they uses their methods by highlighting the initial steps, and then unfolding the methods taken in order to to achieve their final product. I would characterize the cartoon artists style as very blunt and straight-forward. The afro-artist teaching lessons has a direct style that has boundaries, and the Disney artists have more flexible styles because they start at the base, building up whereas the afro artist starts at the top and builds down.